Camp IMovie

This week we decided to do a I Movie.This is a trailer that i made on the ipad.    

My Writing Moment

10/08/15:

My personal learning goal is:

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WALT: describe a moment in time.

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Planning (4 sentences ONLY):

I see…crying, talking,and coming in the,marae and waiting for the call. I hear… shouting,snoring,and crying. I feel… I wonder...why did he die

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Signs of Success (Success Criteria):

I will have been successful when I have used:	Self	Partner or Teacher
written in the present tense
interesting language features (adjectives, adverbs, verbs, simile, metaphor, alliteration, idiom, onomatopoeia)
a range of sentences effectively for planned impact (short sentences used for pace and impact, longer sentences to move the action along)
use 5 (or a mix of) senses to paint a picture in the reader’s mind hear/see/feel/touch/taste
used paragraphs (topic sentence and supporting ideas)

Today’s learning focus is: to write an introduction that hooks the reader in.

Signs of Success (Success Criteria):

I will have been successful when I have used:	Self	Partner or Teacher
Show don’t tell e.g. onomatopoeia, speech, question, describe the setting, action
Language features e.g. simile, metaphor, alliteration idiom
VCOP

Remember: great writers use VCOP in ALL writing!

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Begin writing your writing here:

It was raining and it, took 5 or 6 hours to get there and we all have to be called in the whare nui.

Also we have to walk slowly in there, when i went inside i saw people crying and saying goodbye to him.

And also  i heard people singing to my uncle to say goodbye and i was also singing, and goodbye song to him in samoan and it was so really tough to say goodbye and we all had 1 minutes, to kiss him, and say goodbye.

And that was my moment.At NORTH SHORE AT WHANRAE

In the Marae there was an

• Wharenui
• Wharekai

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